My rating: 3 of 5 stars
There were a few grammatical and spelling errors present that provided some areas of less enjoyable reading. The ending was all weird and switched-up: it went to the birth of her child, then back to before the birth. It was also really weird that the main character was so young - it kind of felt gross in modern day thought. It was also a bit inconsistent, in that it was written as if it were a time that was pre-industrial, but then there were bits of modern slang mixed in such as "pissed."
Despite these problems, the story was still interesting enough to hold my attention, and the characters and situations were unique. I think with some tweaking and editing this could be a very good piece of literature.
View all my reviews